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 Original Posting April 26, 2019

Transformation. The coda, resonance, final note…What makes this beat? Well, it's transformation! The character has changed in a significant way. They may be a whole new person, or just a stronger person. Go back to the Mirror Moment. "Who am I?" The transformation is into a different person. "I'm going to die!" The transformation is into a stronger person.Now, how do we prove the transformation? If they are a stronger person, often just by surviving and returning to normal life. If it was a fundamental change, though, we need to show it. Maybe they sacrifice themselves or something, maybe they give up the icon that has kept them going. One way or another, show that they are transformed.Now, why do we have this here? Basically, the story needs a character change. And here it is! Show the transformation. Readers want emotional engagement and completion. Give it to them.James suggests as a hint that you can plot starting with the transformation. What feeling do you want readers to have after they read your work? What change in the character does that? How do they go about surviving? What could they give up?Just as a reminder, readers want to worry about the characters. Get them engaged with the character, and then make them worry. Will this character get out alive? How has the experience changed them?So, we have come full circle, all the way through the 14 beats of Super Structure. Once more, quickly?Act I1. Disturbance. Something's happening here...2. Care Package. Hey, he's a nice guy!3. Argument against Transformation. No way am I going to change!4. Trouble brewing. Wow, that's not good!5. Doorway of No Return #1. We're off to see the Wizard!Act II6. Kick in the Shins. Ouch, there's a Final Battle up ahead!7. The Mirror Moment. What, me? No...8. Pet the Dog. I can't just ignore that call for help...9. Doorway of No Return #2. Slamming the lid on the boiler...Act III10. Mounting Forces. Everyone's here!11. Lights Out! And it looks bad for our hero!12. Q Factor. But... there's a ray of hope.13. Final Battle. And it's time to fight!14. Transformation. And here's the payoff...Look at how they tie together, too. Disturbance, Trouble brewing, Kick in the Shins, Mounting Forces... all lead up to the Final Battle. Care Package and Pet the Dog make us like the character. Argument against Transformation, Mirror Moment, Lights Out, Q Factor, and Transformation are all about the character and their change. The two doorways? Those are the transitions between Acts, one-way slides from one set of problems to the next. Cool, right?
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Original Posting March 22, 2017

I've lost track, I may have written about this before. James Scott Bell, who has been teaching writing for over 20 years, has a pile of books, articles, and so forth out there, and... he says, "I believe this may be the single most powerful writing strategy I have ever developed."

The title of the book is "Write Your Novel from the Middle: A New Approach for Plotters, Pantsers and Everyone in Between." It's by James Scott Bell. I got mine from Amazon, on the Kindle store.

Basically, Bell was taking a close look at the midpoint. He was trying to figure out just what belongs in there, and why everyone had so much trouble with it. So he started by looking at movies and novels, and seeing what was in the middle. What he found was a moment within a scene that "tells us what the novel or movie is really all about."

One moment that defines the whole story? Wow!

Now, his whole book is talking about how this works and why this works. But, let me pick out some of the highlights. Then you can decide if you want to read the book yourself. I do recommend it, in case you can't tell.

So, Chapter 1 kind of throws down the gauntlet. Here he sketches a plotter, carefully outlining, a pantser, scribbling away with artistic freedom, and even someone in the middle, and promises to help all of them! Then, in chapter 2, he explains where he found this new insight. Right in the middle!

Chapter 3 talks about stakes. "A great novel is the record of how a character fights with death." Simple, right? Life or death. But… Bell admits, there are three kinds of death. Physical, especially for thrillers and such like, is pretty obvious. However, professional death is also a possibility. Where failure means your career is down the toilet, there is no future. Mysteries often use this. Or, perhaps the death is psychological. Dying on the inside. Romance, oddly enough, is probably about facing psychological death – if you don't get together with your soulmate, you're going to die on the inside.

Now, chapter 4 adds in the two pillars. You've probably heard of the three act structure. Between Act I and Act II, between the introductory bang and the middle turning pages, you need a doorway of no return. You tell us who the characters are and the situation, and then something happens that forces that character to deal with the major problem of the plot. Something that makes sure that "there is no way back to the old, comfortable world." Something that forces the main character to confront those life-and-death stakes!

You want to check your first doorway of no return? Bell gives us a checklist!
1. Does your introduction give us a character worth following?
2. Do your opening pages have a disturbance?
3. Do you know the death stakes of your story?
4. Is there a scene that forces the character into the confrontation with those death stakes?
5. Is this strong enough? Can the lead character resist going into battle?
6. For novels, does this scene occur before about 1/5 of your total page count?

The second pillar, as you might've guessed, is another doorway of no return. Bell labels it the "Doorway of No Return #2." Guess what? This time, the doorway makes inevitable the final battle and resolution. That's right, in the second act, we have "a series of actions where the character confronts and resists death and is opposed by counter forces." Then the second doorway looms! This might be an event that feels like a major crisis or setback. It could be a clue, discovery, revelation. Whatever it is, it pushes the lead character into Act III – the climax, the final battle, the resolution.

Checklist!
1. Have you created a major crisis or setback that the lead must overcome?
2. Is there a clue or discovery that makes the final resolution possible?

There you go. Two doorways. And, in between them, you'll discover…

Chapter 5. The magical midpoint moment. Bell calls this the "look in the mirror" moment. What happens here? Well, basically, the lead character looks at himself (in the mirror). There are two basic thoughts that occur here. In a character-driven story, the lead looks at himself and wonders what kind of a person am I? What kind of person am I becoming? What will happen if I overcome my faults? What do I need to change? In a plot-driven story, the lead looks at himself and considers the odds he faces. Typically, death seems certain! So, transformation or facing the toughest odds. Either way, the character looks in the mirror and thinks about what to do.

That moment, and it's not even a whole scene, is the magical midpoint moment. Bell lays out a golden triangle based -- well, peaked -- with that mirror moment. That's right, take a triangle, and put the mirror moment at the top. That's the middle, and everything else in your story fits around it. On one side, the ending, you know the ultimate transformation that the character is headed for, and on the other side, the beginning, you know their pre-story psychology, where they came from.

So that's the middle. One little moment that makes a story! With a look in the mirror (or whatever your character uses to reflect on their situation), and either a thought about who I am and how I am going to change OR a thought about just what kind of odds I have to overcome. And then...

Chapter 6. Backup and think about the pre-story psychology, how did your character get here.

Chapter 7. Look ahead, and describe the ultimate transformation that your character is headed for. Show it to us. Make it visual. Bell suggests a two-step process.

1. Write a paragraph about the inner realization. Free write this, how does the character feel, what kind of thoughts go through their head?
2. Brainstorm actions that prove the transformation has taken place. Not just an internal change, what do they do that shows they are a new person?

Chapter 8. Whoosh! Mirror moment, back story, and ultimate transformation. Simple, right? And yet, it provides a framework to help guide your writing. In fact, in this chapter, Bell walks through how each kind of writer might use this. First, for the outliner, the plotter, Bell suggests starting with a set of "signpost scenes." Here's his list of 14 signpost scenes.

1. Opening disturbance. The ordinary world, and a change, challenge, trouble, or difference.
2. Care package. Someone that the lead character cares about at the beginning of the story. Show the lead doing something.
3. Argument opposed to the transformation. The lead character states a belief that will be overturned by the end.
4. Trouble brewing. Things may settle down after the initial disturbance, but now a greater trouble is coming.
5. Doorway of No Return #1. Something pushes the lead character into Act II, where they face death!
6. A kick in the shins. While trying to solve the problem, achieve the objective, do something, there is a significant setback for the lead character.
7. The mirror moment. This is where the lead character faces what's going on.
8. Pet the dog. During all the turmoil of Act II, the lead character still takes time to help a person or animal weaker than themselves.
9. Doorway of No Return #2. A major setback, crisis, clue or discovery that sets up the final battle.
10. Mounting forces. The opposition brings in even larger opposition!
11. Lights out. Alone, in the dark, all is lost. The dark night of the despondency!
12. Q Factor. Something gives the lead an emotional push, the courage to fight on, to make the right choice. Often a memory or reminder of emotional impact from Act I, or a trusted character recalling the lead to the need to fight for the right.
13. Final battle. Will the lead overcome the forces of evil (outer) or will the lead make the right choice (inner)?
14. Transformation. Show us the change to a stronger or different self, and build the emotional resonance for the audience.

There you go. With the golden triangle, you can focus on the mirror moment, transformation, and back story, and lay them out against this list of signpost scenes.

Pantser? All right. Go ahead and start writing. Meet the characters, try out a few scenes, see what happens. After about 10,000 words or so, stop and take a look at this checklist:

1. Who is the main character? What is their problem?
2. Do they have a moral flaw that is hurting others? If not, could you give them one?
3. How did they develop it? What's the back story on it?
4. Do you want to write an upbeat ending? If so, how will they overcome the flaw and be transformed? What will that scene look like?
5. Do you want to write a downbeat ending? If so, show how the character has a chance to be transformed, but rejects it.

Think about the mirror moment for the character. What do they see in the mirror? Write their inner thoughts.

There you go. You've got the big pieces, the back story, the transformation, and the mirror moment. Write around that! Keep going!

In Between? Use what you like. Probably, start with the outline of the mirror moment and the transformation. Then go back and fill in some pre-story.

Bell also takes a look at how genre, character, theme, and even parallel plots (or multiple subplots?) fit into this approach. If you like to start with a genre, go ahead. He suggests you might start by filling in the sentence, "My XYZ is about (character/vocation) who is (death stakes situation)." XYZ is the genre, and of course, the character, vocation, and death stakes situation describe your story. Next, brainstorm your mirror moments. Do you want it to be internal or external? What is the moral flaw of your character? What are the odds that they face? Third, brainstorm transformation and back story. Your genre work is going to sizzle with that golden triangle in the middle.

How about character? Well, you might want to start by thinking about transformation. What does this character want to achieve, how do they need to grow and change? What will they do to show how far they have come? Then go back to pre-story, and finish up by thinking about the mirror moment to tie that together.

Theme? One of those grand statements about life, the universe, and how it all fits together? Go ahead, pick your statement. Now, who would be a good character to reflect that. You probably want to go directly to the mirror moment, and focus on the kind of death they are facing. What's a scenario that puts them face-to-face with death and that thematic statement? Come up with several versions, and then pick the one you really like. Then lay out the transformation, and go back to the backstory. Bam!

Parallel plots, subplots – guess what. Put a golden triangle in each one, and work out the pieces.

That's it! You've got the writing from the middle insight firmly in your grasp. Now, go practice it.

An exercise? Sure. Take a story, or a novel, that you know well and like. Now, what is the mirror moment in that story? What's the transformation, and what is the backstory? Study how your favorites have done this, or even how you have done it yourself.

By the way, Bell finishes his book with chapter 9, Some Writing Tips. He's got a pile of good information there, so don't think it's all done yet. But the writing from the middle insight really seems to be pretty much wrapped up at the end of chapter 8, so I'll stop here for now.

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Original Posting 20 November 2008

If I'm not sure if I can get this across in text. But it should be fun trying.

The Japanese public television sometimes has some very interesting pieces. This particular one started with a little introduction to the art done by a woman. These are fairly large prints -- the early ones in simple black and white, apparently large woodblock prints. Some of her later work involves additional colors -- one that caught my eye had some brown in fairly large areas, along with at least two shades of green providing leaves for a tree. Almost all of the work includes strong architectural settings.

Then they ran through a little bit of her biography. If I understood correctly, she was born in Taiwan to Japanese parents. Then she lived in Japan for a while, and also had spent some time living in America.

And in the part of the show that really caught my attention, she was visiting Taiwan. A middle-aged woman, well-dressed, with a camera. She did seem to have colorful scarves as part of her outfit. But mostly she seemed almost cool, looking through her glasses at the buildings and other points of interest in Taiwan, stopping to take a picture of a plaza, or getting up on a balcony to take pictures of roofs with colorful dragons at their edges. No smile, seemingly a plastic observer.

Then she met an old friend in a plaza. He invited her to his studio. In this large open space, he had several works under way around the edges. She looked at one or two, without much evident interest. Then he laughed and got out a plywood sheet -- 4 x 8? He laid it on the floor, red side up, and sat down on the floor with it. He got out a small gouge and started carving. Suddenly she was on her knees, smiling, eyes intense, fingers almost twitching, clearly inspired. He took a piece of chalk and scribbled on one part of the work in progress, then grabbed a magic marker and scribbled over that -- and started gouging pieces of that section out. She was watching intently.

That moment of transformation -- when the cool observer suddenly became the involved artist -- was the part of the show that I certainly enjoyed.

They also got out his unfinished piece -- a scroll about a meter wide, and I'm not sure how long, that he's apparently been adding things to for 20 years. A chinese clown face on a baby torso, a looming architectural arch, and other bits and pieces. I gather he has no particular intention of trying to finish it or tie it together into some sort of a finished piece, but the pastiche or hodgepodge felt like there is an underlying unity, a theme of growth and excitement despite that. Almost as if history -- as experienced by an individual person -- was captured on that scroll.

But that's another story.

Maybe the key to this piece is in the kind of art that she does. After all, the sheet of wood with its red coating, carved and chipped and cut, is somewhat cool and reserved. Then coat it with a little ink or paint, and press it into the paper -- and when you lift it up, there's a fresh new picture, shining, unique, just created in that moment of contact between the stiff wood and the soft paper. That's almost the feeling I got, watching the well-dressed photographer suddenly transform into an intense presence at the side of the artist carving on his board.

Fun!
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Original posting 24 October 2008

[poking around in my files, I found this, and realized that I hadn't posted it. (Whoops! Never finished or posted this one. Sorry about that :-) Sometimes we aren't as organized as we might be, eh?]

Chapter 23: Your Protagonist's Emotional Thread

Wrapping up the last pieces of Make a Scene by Jordan Rosenfeld, this chapter looks at the transformation of the character really across the scenes. Most narratives include some growth or change in the character, which really adds meaning and depth. This emotional thread cuts across the individual scenes, and Rosenfeld has some comments about it.

First, of course, is the point that changes in personality -- in beliefs, attitudes, and so forth -- shouldn't be sudden or easy. People don't change without a struggle. To make it feel authentic, to give credibility to each scene, you need to make sure that the change is motivated, and probably somewhat gradual.

In the early scenes, we're establishing everything. Characters, conflicts, problems, etc. Right up front, you can include character-related plot threads:
  • Involvement. How is the protagonist related to the significant situation? Is it his fault, centered on him somehow? Is he integral to it or does he stumble into it?
  • Stakes. What does the protagonist gain or lose because of events?
  • Desires. What does the protagonist want?
  • Fears. What scares the protagonist?
  • Motivation. Why does the protagonist do things?
  • Challenges. How does the significant situation challenge the protagonist?
At the end of the early scenes, you as author can ask yourself if the protagonist is shaky enough? Are there enough problems and conflicts that readers will be worried? Is the protagonist directly involved in a significant situation? Does the protagonist seem to be struggling, trying to act, being forced to change? Is there enough uncertainty -- readers should be trying to figure out what will happen, not betting on a sure thing.

Scenes in the middle make the reader and the protagonists work. This is where the protagonist gets tested and stretched. These scenes need to include:
  • opportunities for crisis and conflict. Makes things harder, more complicated, add problems on top of the problems.
  • opportunities for dramatic and surprising changes. Given the pressures and complications, the protagonist can start acting differently, perhaps in anger, perhaps in achieving more than seemed possible.
  • opportunities for plot complications. Things were bad before, now they're going to get horrible. New complications and new complexity.
  • opportunities to test drive new behaviors. Emotional reactions can start to pop under the pressure and stress. The protagonist can surprise us.
  • opportunities for dramatic tension. Put the protagonist in danger, emotional or physical, and build an aura of tension -- tighten the suspense.
Desperation, uncertainty, trials and tribulations. Some protagonists get worse before they get better. That's okay. This is the part where the character shows how they really behave when things get hot and tough. The protagonist learns who their real friends are and what their own strengths and weaknesses really are, all in preparation for the final scenes.

The final scenes are where all of the changes get wrapped up. This is where we show who is left after the climax -- who has the protagonist become? So you need to know:
  • what are the consequences of having desires met?
  • what are the consequences of having fears realized?
  • did what the protagonist wants change? What is it now?
  • did what the protagonist fears change?
  • how does the protagonist view the significant situation now?
This is where you demonstrate character change. You need to show through action or dialogue what has changed. You also need to answer any plot questions that are left. Tie up the major consequences. In most cases, this includes showing:
  • the protagonist has learned something
  • the protagonist's attitudes and behavior have changed
  • the protagonist has started a new journey or direction
"The key to successful character transformation is to let your character changes unfold dramatically but also realistically. Let the reader see your characters change by how they act and speak, and by the choices they make within the framework of scenes, not through narrative summaries."
That's what Rosenfeld says about the emotional threads in the plot.

What shall we add? Well, how about taking a look at a story or novel that you like, and consider the growth of the protagonist? Even in a thriller or action story, we're likely to find that the protagonist learns something, changes, faces up to their fears and beats them down, etc. So start at the beginning, and track that golden thread of the protagonist's emotional fabric, beliefs, etc. How is it set up in the beginning? What happens to it in the middle? And at the climax, how does the writer handle it? Normally there is a definite shift from the well-worn emotions at the beginning through tearing and holes in the middle into a restructuring and rebuilding at the end. Something like that, anyway. How does it work in the stories you like?

Then, turn around and consider a story or novel that you are working on. Do you show the readers the emotions, the beliefs and attitudes of your protagonist? In the beginning, do you let them know how the hero feels, and where the flaw is? What about in the middle? Do you keep that thread going? And in the climax and ending, do you show how the person has grown and changed? You don't have to spend pages in internal turmoil and debate, but make sure that the reader feels for the protagonist.

S'aright?

How about a third one? Okay, let's start with picking two numbers from one to 12. Two different numbers, okay? You may roll two pair of dice if you like. Got your numbers? Now find them in this list:
1.  sadness  2. distress  3.  relief  4.  joy
5.  hate  6. love 7.  fear  8. anticipation
9.  anger  10.  guilt  11.  gratitude  12. pride
What you have there is two emotions. Maybe sadness and guilt. And here's the exercise. Consider how you might show a reader that the protagonist feels sadness, right at the start of a story. And then consider how you might show a reader that they feel guilt -- at the end of a tale. And for bonus points, consider how sadness transforms into guilt. Now can you put that together into a story? From sadness over his parents' death to a lurking sense of guilt? Or . . .

Get those writing neurons crackling, and write.

where were you when the lights went on?
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Original posting: Wed, 30 Apr 1997 23:38:04 EDT


Since I have recently been relaxing with Kenneth Burke, and have made
some notes which may contribute their own tangency (no, that's
tanginess...zest, flavor, saviour...something like that at lease...
well, let's get on with the tossing, okay?)

Some Bits for the Salad
(p. 10) "A poet's identification with imagery...is...merely a concern with _terms for transformation in general._"

"When considering transformation in general, we may stress the respects in which many different kinds of image can perform the same function."

(p. 12) "The range of images that can be used for concretizing the process of transformation is limited only by the imagination and ingenuity of poets. But the selective nature of existence favors some images above others--and high among them, naturally, is the imagery of Life and Death, with its variants of being born, being reborn, dying, killing, and being killed."

"For the so-called 'desire to kill' a certain person is much more properly analyzable as a desire to _transform the principle_ which that person _represents._"
from
A Rhetoric of Motives
Kenneth Burke
University of California Press 1969

I can feel the celery snap, I can taste the dressing now...
lettuce ahead, croutons all around, and mashed sardines at base:
words tossed everywhich way!
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original posting: Fri, 26 Sep 1997 09:43:11 EDT

EXERCISE: Plot #12: Transformation: 20 Master Plots

Based on the book "20 Master Plots (And How to Build Them)" by Ronald B. Tobias.  ISBN 0-89879-595-8.

Master Plot #12: Transformation
(p. 153) "The plot of transformation deals with the process of change in the protagonist as she journeys through one of the many stages of life. The plot isolates a portion of the protagonist's life that represents the period of change, moving from one significant character state to another."
Some "standard" points of change: becoming adult; war and combat; search for identity; divorce and other family shifts; facing violence; deaths; and learning something new (remember Pygmalion?).

But the large-scale change is only one kind.  Consider small events that may build and shake lives...

Structure:
    Phase one - an incident that starts a change in the protagonist's life.  Be sure the reader knows who the protagonist is before the change!
    Now let the ripples of the incident begin to stretch out..."There are lessons to be learned, judgments to be made, insights to be seen."
    Phase two - show us the full effects of the transforming incident. What hidden parts of the main character are stirred up in the wake of the storm?
    Phase three - show us (often via another incident) the results of the transformation.  What does the protagonist (and the reader) learn?
"It's common for a protagonist to learn lessons other than what he expected to learn.  The real lessons are often the hidden or unexpected ones.  Expectations are baffled; illusions are destroyed.  Reality overtakes fantasy."
Checklist:
  1. Does your plot of transformation deal with the process of change as the protagonist journeys through one of the many stages of life?
  2. Does the plot isolate a portion of the protagonist's life that represents the period of change, moving from one significant character state to another?
  3. Does the story concentrate on the nature of change and how it affects the protagonist from start to end of the experience?
  4. Does the first dramatic phase relate the transforming incident that propels the protagonist into a crisis, starting the process of change?
  5. Does the second dramatic phase depict the effects of the transformation?  Does it concentrate on the self-examination and character of the protagonist?
  6. Does the third dramatic phase contain a clarifying incident representing the final stage of the transformation?  Does the character understand the true nature of the experience and how it has affected him?  Does true growth and understanding occur?
  7. What is the price of the wisdom gained?  a certain sadness?
Thus spake Tobias (along with some paraphrasing).

Transformation, change...what could be more appropriate for our little Halloweenies contest?  (Don't know what I'm talking about?  Take a look at http://web.mit.edu/mbarker/www/hall97/hall.html !)

Let's pick a number!  From one to six, or thereabouts?
1.  amphisbaena -- serpent having a head at each end (Greece)
2.  dybbuk -- dead person's evil spirit that invades a living person (Jewish folklore)
3.  ghoul -- evil being that feeds on corpses
4.  lamia -- monster with the head and breast of a woman and body of a serpent that lured children to suck their blood
5.  phoenix -- immortal bird that cremates itself every 500 years, then emerges reborn from the ashes (Greece)
6.  windigo -- evil spirit, cannibal demon (Native American folklore)
[taken from the section on Mythological and Folkloric Beings in Random House Word Menu, ISBN 0-679-40030-3]

Now, back up and consider your character(s).  How old are they?  What change or shift in their life are they facing?  For example, someone who is just starting high school has a little different viewpoint from someone who is about to graduate from college and face the world of work, or from the young couple about to have their first baby, or the slightly older parent thinking about their child leaving home, or... And don't forget, if you don't want to go with the big shifts, a little dabble do you!  So think about the change they were facing...

Then mix in that delightful creature you picked up in the first part. Offhand, I'd recommend making a couple of lists.  First, a list of points about the change--what's good, what's bad, what are we going to learn from it?  Second, a list of points about the monster in our midst--what's good, what's bad, what are we going to do about it?  Now, look at the linkages between the lists.  Can defeating the monster be turned into a sort of metaphor for the change we are dealing with?  What if we don't defeat the monster, but learn from it something about ourselves?  Could defeating the monster be an "anti-metaphor," contrasted to the change which we cannot defeat?

What if we are transformed into the monster?  Or what if there is no monster, just poor sad humanity, hiding behind the cloak of the monster?

Let's see.  How about something borrowed, and perhaps blue?  Pick a number, one to six, and let's see what you got:
1.  a yellow highlighter
2.  a red papiermache pepper
3.  a 5 pound bag of sugar
4.  a spoonful of hot fudge
5.  a two year old comic book from a dentist's waiting room
6.  a clipboard
There you go.  Now you have a prop, a little bit of physical setting which you are going to cleverly weave into the story.  And don't forget, if you mention hot fudge in the first scene, someone should have a sundae before we get done...

Put it all together, it spells...

Well, that's up to you!

Write!
tink

[Other exercises and all of the Master plots can be found at http://community.livejournal.com/writercises/]
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Mon, 19 Nov 2001 13:47:58 -0500

Okay, let's try this...

"Lit up like a whorehouse on Saturday night."  Loren D. Estleman, quoted in Falser than a Weeping Crocodile and other similes by Elyse Sommer and Mike Sommer.

There's a fine phrase, talking about something being lit up.  But since we're stretching our writing muscles, let's consider two things.

First, what might you be writing about that would be lit up?  Can you think of a scene that would need some description around how well lit up it is?

Second, of course, let's consider a few variations on that simile.  What would you consider using as a simile to illustrate being lit up?  What does it do if you make it "lit up like a Parisian whorehouse on Saturday night?" Or what about "as dark as a whorehouse on Monday night?"  (er...when's the night off?)

Times Square at the stroke of midnight, Jan. 1?

like a four year old's face when Daddy comes home?

Go ahead, crank out a few similes about being well lit!  And then consider the effect they have on a scene.

If you like, go ahead and write the scene.

Or even the whole tale, if you have the time and the idea.
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Tue, 11 Sep 2001 23:40:51 -0400

On a television program early this morning, they were talking with students in Cherry Hill, NJ, about the high school problems.

A statement made by one student rang oddly in my mind.

"There's just this natural fear of anyone different."

This was the justification for ostracizing and harassment of a local "freak" -- a student who dressed differently, likes Marilyn Manson (who is that?), and otherwise doesn't fit in.

Somehow, this notion that difference in some way justifies fear, anger, hatred... it doesn't ring true to me.  Certainly, we've all heard the tales of pink monkeys, but are we indeed trapped by such reactions, or are we able to look beyond our prejudices and reactions?

Anyway, a suggested exercise:

a.  Pick two of the following 12 emotions.  You may use two dice if you like.

1.  sadness  2. distress  3.  relief  4.  joy 
5.  hate  6. love 7.  fear  8. anticipation 
9.  anger  10.  guilt  11.  gratitude  12. pride

Now, pick a gaggle of characters, and one odd-ball(or ballette, as you decide).

Scene one -- introduce your characters, and establish that the gaggle feels one of your two emotions towards the odd-ball.

Scene two through n -- spend some time exploring those relations, the reactions of the odd-ball, the rising xxxxx of the gaggle, the bystanders joining in and raising the stakes.

Scene n+1 -- revelation.  Somehow, someway, let one or more of the gaggle get a good hard look at what they are doing, and at what walking in the shoes of the odd ball means.  This should result in the shift from the first emotion to the second one.

et diminuendo -- now, let us look at your second emotion, driven by the revelation.

Go ahead, spin that tale, warp those words, let the pink monkey dance on the table tops and humanity triumph!

(What, you don't like this one?  How about another tale, or a poem, based around the "natural fear" of difference?  Perhaps something about endogamy and exogamy?)
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Tue, 01 Jan 2002 23:00:00 -0500

(Get ready with the spit...he's turning again :-)

Friends, Enemies, And Other Travelers

That turning point is becoming a pretty significant writing resource for you, isn't it?  First it was important to you, then you explored some of the other ways that it might have turned out, and looked at the background and future of it.  I think there's one more area you might want to look at while you're exploring your turning point.

I'm sure that there were other people involved with your turning point.  Some may have been friends, some not so friendly, and others related in various ways.  While you can't do this with the real events, in writing you can certainly focus the people, add a significant person, get rid of some extras, make the greedy boss just a little bit more evidently eeeevil, have the waitress drop just the right words to crystallize your thinking, or whatever.

So take a few minutes and think about the characters around your turning point.  Do you need a "wise man" to guide you?  How about a comic foil to draw out the irony of the situation?

It's always fun to consider writing up the scene from one or more of their viewpoints, too.  What happens when you look at your skiing accident from your daughter's viewpoint?  Who is the best person to tell the story of this turning point so that your audience feels the passion, hears the excitement, sees the glory and the terror?

Okay?  Explore those turning points, there's writing in there!

"I dream in my dream all the dreams of the other dreamers,
And I become the other dreamers."  Walt Whitman

a butterfly did dream... tink

[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Fri, 26 Sep 1997 09:43:11 EDT

Based on the book "20 Master Plots (And How to Build Them)" by Ronald B. Tobias. ISBN 0-89879-595-8.

Master Plot #12: Transformation

(p. 153) "The plot of transformation deals with the process of change in the protagonist as she journeys through one of the many stages of life. The plot isolates a portion of the protagonist's life that represents the period of change, moving from one significant character state to another."

Some "standard" points of change: becoming adult; war and combat; search for identity; divorce and other family shifts; facing violence; deaths; and learning something new (remember Pygmalion?).

But the large-scale change is only one kind. Consider small events that may build and shake lives...

Structure:
Phase one - an incident that starts a change in the protagonist's life. Be sure the reader knows who the protagonist is before the change! Now let the ripples of the incident begin to stretch out..."There are lessons to be learned, judgments to be made, insights to be seen."
Phase two - show us the full effects of the transforming incident. What hidden parts of the main character are stirred up in the wake of the storm?
Phase three - show us (often via another incident) the results of the transformation. What does the protagonist (and the reader) learn? "It's common for a protagonist to learn lessons other than what he expected to learn. The real lessons are often the hidden or unexpected ones. Expectations are baffled; illusions are destroyed. Reality overtakes fantasy."

Checklist:
  1. Does your plot of transformation deal with the process of change as the protagonist journeys through one of the many stages of life?
  2. Does the plot isolate a portion of the protagonist's life that represents the period of change, moving from one significant character state to another?
  3. Does the story concentrate on the nature of change and how it affects the protagonist from start to end of the experience?
  4. Does the first dramatic phase relate the transforming incident that propels the protagonist into a crisis, starting the process of change?
  5. Does the second dramatic phase depict the effects of the transformation? Does it concentrate on the self-examination and character of the protagonist?
  6. Does the third dramatic phase contain a clarifying incident representing the final stage of the transformation? Does the character understand the true nature of the experience and how it has affected him? Does true growth and understanding occur?
  7. What is the price of the wisdom gained? a certain sadness?
Thus spake Tobias (along with some paraphrasing).

Let's pick a number! From one to six, or thereabouts?
  1. amphisbaena -- serpent having a head at each end (Greece)
  2. dybbuk -- dead person's evil spirit that invades a living person (Jewish folklore)
  3. ghoul -- evil being that feeds on corpses
  4. lamia -- monster with the head and breast of a woman and body of a serpent that lured children to suck their blood
  5. phoenix -- immortal bird that cremates itself every 500 years, then emerges reborn from the ashes (Greece)
  6. windigo -- evil spirit, cannibal demon (Native American folklore)
[taken from the section on Mythological and Folkloric Beings in Random House Word Menu, ISBN 0-679-40030-3]

Now, back up and consider your character(s). How old are they? What change or shift in their life are they facing? For example, someone who is just starting high school has a little different viewpoint from someone who is about to graduate from college and face the world of work, or from the young couple about to have their first baby, or the slightly older parent thinking about their child leaving home, or... And don't forget, if you don't want to go with the big shifts, a little dabble do you! So think about the change they were facing...

Then mix in that delightful creature you picked up in the first part. Offhand, I'd recommend making a couple of lists. First, a list of points about the change--what's good, what's bad, what are we going to learn from it? Second, a list of points about the monster in our midst--what's good, what's bad, what are we going to do about it? Now, look at the linkages between the lists. Can defeating the monster be turned into a sort of metaphor for the change we are dealing with? What if we don't defeat the monster, but learn from it something about ourselves? Could defeating the monster be an "anti-metaphor," contrasted to the change which we cannot defeat?

What if we are transformed into the monster? Or what if there is no monster, just poor sad humanity, hiding behind the cloak of the monster?

Let's see. How about something borrowed, and perhaps blue? Pick a number, one to six, and let's see what you got:
  1. a yellow highlighter
  2. a red papiermache pepper
  3. a 5 pound bag of sugar
  4. a spoonful of hot fudge
  5. a two year old comic book from a dentist's waiting room
  6. a clipboard
There you go. Now you have a prop, a little bit of physical setting which you are going to cleverly weave into the story. And don't forget, if you mention hot fudge in the first scene, someone should have a sundae before we get done...

Put it all together, it spells...

Well, that's up to you!

Write!

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