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Original Posting 2022/4/11
It must be time for chapter five! You are here: Using setting! A stage, a place, a location? Sure… where are the events of your scene taking place? Raymond tells us that writers sometimes don’t take advantage of setting because they are focused on the dynamics of plot, character, and dialogue. But… the right setting can enhance the impact a lot. It can add thematic dimension or suspense. A different setting can make a scene more exciting, more intense, or more comical. I mean, think about the Wizard of Oz set in… Times Square? Nope… How important is setting? Well, think about some of your favorite story, novel, or film scenes, and imagine setting them some place else.

So, how much setting description do you need? Enough to achieve your goal, but not so much that it detracts from the rest of the scene. Think about the dominating purpose of your scene, then decide how much setting description works. Beware of overdescribing, because you love those purple plains strewn with lots of metaphors. Imply and suggest instead. Also, watch out for clumping, which is infodumping your setting description, all in one huge lump! Figure out what’s essential, then scatter those bits in between actions. A good trick is to ask a question, then give us some description, and then answer the question. The reader will pay attention, and the little delay boosts suspense, too.

Setting also can help with pacing! Both within a scene, and the scenes can help control the overall pacing. For example, suspense novels often have sedentary scenes with plenty of setting description in between the action-packed chases. Detective novels often use settings to help keep the reader interested. 

Setting can even tie into theme. Oh, it might just be interesting, exciting, or suspenseful. But it can be a key part of the story, too. Consider “fish out of water” stories. That clash of cultures and backgrounds makes the story.  Also, sea stories, westerns, jungle tales… the setting helps make the story.

Raymond suggests that there isn’t any best technique here. Try out an interesting setting to pick up the pace, or pick one that fits the theme. Try out longer passages of description, or short punchy ones. Basically, write the scene the way you feel like the writing it. You’re discovering your story, and setting can be part of the discovery.

His workshop focuses on three keys. 1, describe the characteristics of the setting. 2, the setting affects the character(s) in the following ways? 3, the setting affects the plot in the following ways? He suggests tackling this at two levels, one being the grand scene of the general setting, and one being the specific scene you are working on.

Go ahead. Where is your scene? What’s in the background? Is there an elephant in the living room?
Write! 
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 Original Posting 7/20/2019

Writer's Digest, December 1991 on pages 26-29 had an article by Jules Archer about common problems. "New writers tend to repeat each other's mistakes – errors you can easily avoid with care and rewriting. A veteran writing instructor points out 10 of the most common flaws."Here are the 10 most common errors that Jules saw and his solutions.1. Expository diarrhea. He gives an example of a paragraph filled with details, and utterly boring. Hanging up the telephone takes one long sentence. Walking into the corridor is another one. And so on. "Such scenes get written because new writers are often unsure how to move a character from one place to the next, so they do it by describing every physical movement. The correct way to reposition a character is quickly and simply, eschewing pointless detail, just as films do by a swift cut from one scene to the next. A simple space break between paragraphs can move a character to a new place, introduce a new scene, or show passage of time.2. Runaway Dialogue. "New writers believe they must reproduce such small talk to make the conversation realistic. But that's not the economical way characters talk in professional short stories." It may not be exactly the way people talk, but dialogue that advances the storyline and gets to the point quickly feels more natural to readers.3. Obscure writing. Watch out for pronouns that the reader can't identify. Anytime a reader has to stop and reread a sentence or paragraph, you, the writer, have not been clear.4. Anti-climactic sentences. Jules' example is "Sam Gordon was guilty of murder, cheating on his taxes, and cutting into supermarket lines." Unless your writing comedy, put the most serious thing, the most powerful thing at the end of the sentence.5. Unclear antecedents. Here's Jules example. "Weeping in despair for the death of his one love, the hospital was grimly silent around him." Weeping hospitals! Whoops.6. Deadly lead paragraphs. Your lead paragraph must be interesting and hook your reader. "Which lead would make you want to read on? The story lead that offers an interesting conflict or problem has a better chance of capturing reader interest."7. Change in focus. Who is the point of view? Set it up, and stick to it. "When you're telling a story through protagonist's viewpoint, you can't have anything happen outside of the protagonist's presence or knowledge."8. Think pieces. Make sure you do your research. Not just an opinion piece, but something specific with solid facts.9. Misspellings. "A more basic flaw is submitting a manuscript full of misspellings." Especially if you are self-publishing, you need to catch that yourself.10. Not rewriting enough. "Perhaps the most destructive of these common mistakes is the failure to rewrite sufficiently." Throw out the garbage language, and write the best you can.It's basics, but sometimes we all need a reminder. So take something you've been working on, and check for those basics. Expository diarrhea, runaway dialogue, obscure writing, anti-climactic sentences, unclear antecedents, a deadly lead, bouncing focus, lack of specific facts, misspellings, and not enough rewriting?Right? Write!
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Original Posting 5/27/2019

Writer's Digest, January 1994, on pages 44-46 has an article by Hal Blythe and Charlie Sweet talking about anecdotes. As the subtitle says, "Anecdotes told by one character to another are an effective means of accomplishing a host of storytelling objectives."
 
They start out by recounting part of Jaws, when Robert Shaw and Richard Dreyfuss are waiting for the great white shark to attack, and Shaw tells a war story. Even while it lets us the viewers catch our breath, it adds to the tension. Now, having characters tell anecdotes to other characters is fairly common in stories, on paper, stage, and movies. So, how can you add this tool to your toolbox? Why would you want to? Well, it at least provides variety, right? But it also has a number of other advantages.
 
First, it helps you deliver information. Sure, writers may get away with infodumping, but playwrights and others usually dramatize information. Even little stories about other characters can help with this.
 
Second, anecdotes are engaging for the audience! Show, right? Well, anecdotes make things very clear. "In short, the more your audience can picture what's happening (instead of trying to decipher abstractions), and the more they wonder about what's going on, the more involved though be in your story." Simple, right?
 
Third, anecdotes often are used to illustrate themes. "An effective means of simplifying a difficult concept is to create a narrative that dramatizes your story's major insights." These anecdotes "translate complex ideas into more easily understood situations, characters, and actions."
 
Fourth, anecdotes can deepen characterization. Readers need insight into characters, and a well constructed anecdote can give them that insight. Often, they can explain motivation.
 
Fifth, anecdotes can save words. You can accomplish multiple goals. Exposition, engaging the audience, characterization, and theme? All in a short anecdote.
 
So, what if you wanted to let your audience in on a character's motivation for a dream? Well, you could just describe it, perhaps in a flashback. But you want to emphasize it, so, think about dramatizing it. When one character tells another character about something, that anecdote gets a little extra polish. They provide an example in their article. Engagement, exposition, theme, characterization, all compressed into a few words. Not bad!
 
Now, to make the-story-within-the-story most effective, use it sparingly. If a short story has four or five anecdotes, people are likely to notice. You can vary the presentation, picking a different speaker and listener, and maybe changing the length. Remember that the anecdotes don't have to be autobiographical every time, for that matter, they don't have to be about humans. The old stories about animals may be just the right anecdote for your story. Do try to have your anecdotes serve multiple functions. It's not just content. "The fact that a character chooses to tell a story, how he relates it, and to whom he tells it can all divulge something about the teller."
 
So, kind of like the cream filling in an Oreo, think about adding a-story-within-a-story, an anecdote, to your story! Where can it add just the right touch?
 
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Original posting 13 March 2009

Details, details

Writers Digest, June 2006, Pages 18 and 19, in the Fiction Essentials column by James Scott Bell, talks about "Weaving Your Research." The point is to add details about setting so that they enrich the story but don't overload the reader. No info dumps here.

Bell starts with a little story about Dean Koontz, writing as Leigh Nichols, and the novel The Key to Midnight. It's set in Kyoto Japan, and people familiar with Kyoto have congratulated Koontz on how well he portrays things, asking when he visited. His reply? "I've never even been in the Pacific Ocean up to my neck."

How did he do it? Research. Books, maps, memoirs, other books. And then he boiled it down to details seamlessly woven into the narrative. So how can you do that? Two steps.

Step one -- do the research. Find sources and resources, and work with them. One author starts with his own research reading, writes first drafts, and then talks to experts about specific questions. You also want to give them a chance to talk to you, to tell you what they think is important.

Step two -- weave the details in. We all have a tendency to overdo settings and descriptions -- we got all that stuff, let me dump it on the reader. Frankly, readers don't care. They're interested in the characters. Setting and details are important as far as they help make the characters richer and more believable. So you need to integrate details into the story.
  1. Place your details inside action. These details make the character's actions feel real.
  2. Place details inside character's thoughts. Now the observations serve two purposes -- they show us the setting, and we learn little more about the character.
Balance detail and action. Bell doesn't mention it here, but the sandwich approach works pretty well. Give us a little taste of action -- a hook. Then spend some time on setting and detail. And cap it with more action. We're more happy with that sandwich than just a plain slab of details and description.
"Pay attention to the writing styles of your favorite authors and follow the tips above to interlace research into your characters' respective thoughts and journeys. Do it well and your readers will be swept away by your writing without even realizing it's the colorful details you've sewn in that make the story so good."
Sounds like fun! Here's an assignment. Go over to Wikipedia http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Main_Page , and poke around a little. Maybe try out the random article link. Collect your research, then put it in a scene. Make sure you wrap those details in action or in character viewpoint.

Okay? Write!

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