TECH: Tone

Mar. 24th, 2010 12:59 pm
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
Original posting 7 February 2010

Writer's Digest, April 2007, pages 87 to 89, have an article, sidebar, and exercise by Nancy Kress dealing with tone. The article is very short -- two paragraphs. The sidebar is considerably longer, looking at first sexual encounters from four different novels, and analyzing the tone being used. The exercise is actually the longest, a full-page with the exercise and sample passages. So let's take a look at what this is all about.

First, Nancy Kress tells us that tone in speaking and tone in writing are very much the same thing -- attitude. "Specifically, tone refers to the writer's attitude towards his characters and story." Second, Nancy suggests that before writing we need to ask ourselves what tone do we want the story to have. Cynical, satiric, understated, tragic? Funny, heroic, matter-of-fact, tragic? Figure out how you want the readers to view the characters' feelings and actions, and what your attitude is towards them, and how you are going to present them. That's tone.

The sidebar... well, we'll skip the quotes from the novels. The first one is emotional, describing the character's thoughts and actions directly, putting us inside the character. His experience is truth.

The second takes a very different approach. The character's attitude is anger, although the overall tone is comic. Exaggeration, juxtaposition of irrelevant details, it's all comedy.

The third one is angry. Crude, demeaning language. Hatred permeates the relationship.

And the last one -- epic? Heroic fantasy. Lofty, distanced from emotional details, making the event more than just an event between two participants.

And an exercise. Pretty simple. Take this opening:
Luke said, "Pam, why won't you go to Florida with me?"
Then write a short passage in each of the four tones identified below. A few lines of dialogue, some description, whatever you think is right.

1. Comic (think Woody Allen, Janet Evanovich). Suggestions: an absurd motive;  exaggeration; wildly dissimilar elements placed close together.

2. Romantic (think Nora Roberts, Laurel K. Hamilton). Suggestions: an emotional motive; sensory details; metaphors or other heightened language.

3. Factual (think John Grisham, Jody Picoult). Suggestions: a plausible and ordinary motive; everyday dialogue; mundane details.

4. Cynical (think Raymond Chandler, and Ed McBain). Suggestions: a sarcastic motive; gritty details; weary emotions.

I think we'll skip Nancy Kress's sample paragraphs. But why not give it a shot? Try writing a short passage in each of the four tones. Make us laugh, make us sigh, make us get out our notebooks, and make us squint?

Whatever, write!
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
first posted 28 April 2007

Bringing Your Character to Life

How do you make compelling rounded characters? Well, Writers Digest, August 2004, page 20 and 21, James Scott Bell suggests three key features. Let's take a look at them.

Attitude! "Compelling characters have a way of looking at the world that's uniquely their own" In first person point of view, the attitude is part of the narrator's voice. In third person, the dialogue, actions, and thoughts of the character (if you sneak into the head of the protagonist, at least) show us their attitude. James suggests a little freeform fast writing to learn about the attitude of the character. You might use some of these questions to kick off your thinking (answer from the character's pov, please? Although your own answers may be interesting, right now we're exploring your character):
  • What do you care most about in the world?
  • What really ticks you off?
  • If you could do one thing, and succeed at it, what would it be?
  • What people do you most admire and why?
  • What was your childhood like?
  • What's the most embarrassing thing that ever happened to you?
Courage. "Novels are about challenges and threats to your hero, and that means he's going to have to show courage. This creates a rooting interest in the character, always a good thing for readers." James suggests that a dragging novel often means the protagonists has given up too easily, is just taking it or thinking about it. Make sure that your protagonist gets up and does things.

"Go back and put some fight in an earlier scene. Get the hero's dander up again, make him take some action against a person or circumstance. Whether it's as simple as taking a step into the unknown or charging ahead into a dangerous battle, courage bonds your readers with the main character."

Surprises! Raymond Chandler suggested that when your story starts to drag, "bring in a guy with a gun." Surprise us! People often do surprising things when they are excited, under stress, or have some inner conflict pushing them. So get your protagonist in trouble, crank up the tension, and let the behavior be a surprise.

Okay. That's the three suggestions that James had. Make sure your character has attitude, courage, and surprises us. Now, how do you put that into action? One easy thing to do is go back over your story and see where the dialogue or the action shows us the attitude, courage, and surprises of the character. You might use a highlighter and see if there are sections of your story that don't get marked up. If so, you may want to go back and think about putting some attitude, courage, and surprises in those sections. Another trick is to do some brainstorming. Take a sheet of paper, and make a list of at least five possible dialogue or action bits that would show us the attitude, courage, and surprises of the character.  15 little bits? Then pick out some really good ones and work them into the story.

In any case, don't forget. A character with attitude, facing vicissitudes with courage, and some fireworks and other surprises keeps the reader reading - and that's the point!

So write.
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Mon, 24 Jul 2000 07:27:44 -0400

As the words run around the world, we find...

The Japan Times, 7/21, p. 17
Nourishing One's Own Inner Source of Joy by Toshimi Horiuchi

"One's inner sun is also a major source of joy.  When well cultivated, this sun's spirit pervades one's entire inner world not unlike the haunting loveliness that surrounds myrtle in full bloom, or the delicate crystallization of earth-stones into gems.  In either case, joy is created.  One's inner sun is a joymaker."

<skip a little -- and wonder just which one is myrtle?>

"It is well, then, to put this inner sun to work not only producing gems of joy for oneself but gems of joy to share with others.  When the soul sings out its joy, its echo is heard in the hearts of others like heaven's rays reflected upon a stream of water running through a grassy meadow."

<and the gentle stream rolls on...>

"So as we touch or 'kiss' a gem of joy, a thrill rises up from within because of the very mysteriousness of the event, like a star throbbing in heaven's deepest repose.  When a gem of joy resounds in the depth of the soul, we 'hear' a polished song like the song of the eastern sky embracing the purest dawn.  When we 'see' a gem of joy glittering in the heart of the soul, our spirit sparkles like the western sky reflecting the colors of the setting."

<tumbling synesthesia smooths the edges of our minds to...>

"In this way we infinitely elevate the quality of joy.  We rouse bright waves on the flat surface of life, creating chain reactions that attract and prolong the waves of joy."

Rouse bright waves on the flat surface of life...

Create chain reactions that attract and prolong the waves of joy...

Think about your writing (poesy, short storettes, the occasional friction, perhaps even a dash of non-fiction and light?).  How do you rouse bright waves in your writing?  Have you ever created a chain reaction that attracted and prolonged waves of joy?  What about those gems of joy -- have you seen them in others' writings?  Collected and shared them with others, to see the delight they find in those same facets?  Have you polished and cut the edges of your own gems of joy, kissing them, resounding with their song, sparkling and glittering with all the colors of the sunset?

How do you dig for these gems in yourself?  Where do you find the supersaturated solution that crystallizes around the fragmentary thought, how do you shape and finish your gems, what settings do you use, how do you choose to display the joys?

Tell us about the games that you play with your gems, found, borrowed, or honestly expressed from your own being...

In short (or in long!)...
write?
[identity profile] mbarker.livejournal.com
original posting: Thu, 25 Jan 2001 12:08:00 -0500

Let's take a look at some thoughts from Writing As a Lifelong Skill by Sanford Kaye, ISBN 0-534-22218-8

Up to Now: Your Writing History

(Page 13) Continuing, "Then try to put into words your attitude toward writing.  For some people writing is an act of futility, while for others it plays a crucial role in personal development...."

And for the next slice, write down your attitude toward writing.  What do you feel about writing?  What do you feel while writing?  How are your emotions tied to your writing?

Definition, attitude,...

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